> I grew up just as computers were becoming mainstream,
> the spread of the internet coincided with my teens,
> saw the rise of “Web 2.0” during college
i usually eat up these stories.
but your vague phrases, on both sides of the equation,
make it impossible to make any sense out of the piece.
you recognize great change has occurred during this time,
but without specifying the years, _exactly,_ the message
you've sent (and any meaning it might have) is confused.
attaching solid dates -- the exact year when you born,
the exact year when you graduated from college, etc. --
would give remarkably more meaningful reference points.
> the spread of the internet coincided with my teens,
> saw the rise of “Web 2.0” during college
i usually eat up these stories.
but your vague phrases, on both sides of the equation, make it impossible to make any sense out of the piece.
you recognize great change has occurred during this time, but without specifying the years, _exactly,_ the message you've sent (and any meaning it might have) is confused.
attaching solid dates -- the exact year when you born, the exact year when you graduated from college, etc. -- would give remarkably more meaningful reference points.
-bowerbird