It is not an improvement. It is far less witty and intelligent.
eat cheese for cheese in cheeses when cheese is blue
I would do: for cheese in cheeses
if cheese is blue
eat(cheese)
I can have a minimal syntax, but retain some of the unnecessary bits to make it easier to read. If the author finds themselves writing code that is hard to read, they should just not write it that way. Write it the way you (and your team) like it to be written.